You have no citation for your hook – which is alos copied.
You have no background to the general topic
You have no thesis – only an announcement and that is half your introduction
Body 1 – Where are your arguments – it seems to come from a collection of sources.
Body 2 – Information is basically the same point as in body 1
Body 3 – in text citations are not correct. The language is very good – too good for this level
Counter- is not developed…in text citation is not correct . I am also not sure what your point is in your refutation.. WHy is online shopping any different from ‘normal shopping’ in the effects?
Conclusion:- Is this paper about COMPULSIVE buyers? I am confused. You have not summarized the body paragraphs.
Your in text citations are generally not correct
Reference page needs a little work
There are some citations that are not in your reference page.